At her blog, OxyJen, jjdebenedictis has been generously (too mild a word) giving crits of the first pages of novels submitted in Nathan Bransford's contest to all who request them. A lotta all have requested. To return the favor in one dinky way, here's my crit of jj's:
Holy shit! That is intense. I don't like or willingly read horror or gore or anything gothic but, wow, you hooked me with your characters, the vivid imagery, the breathless pace...girl, your first page is all that! In the first paragraph or so I was briefly confused because I thought Wyhkman (or whatever) and the cart driver were the same guy. That straightened itself out quickly enough and whoosh, I was caught up. I really want to know what a blooddrinker is. Although, probably, I don't really want to know.